If I were you I'd change the beginning.

如果我是你的話，我會把開頭改一改。

Time is money, but money is not time.

時間就是金錢，但金錢不是時間。

I think it is important to understand the relations between parents and their children. They spend time, energy and money in bringing up children and providing them with what they need. Then, as with young birds, the time comes for the young to leave. As

我認為父母和孩子們之間的相互理解是很重要的。父母花費時間、精力和金錢帶大孩子們，給他們提供所需的一切。然后，年輕人就像小鳥飛離家一樣離開了家。正如我們所說，所輕人長大飛走的一天是必然會到來的。盡管這時父母會感到難過，但是他們感情用事是不對的。